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The first thing I want to do is to travel to QingDao seeing some marine animals,including lobsters and sea lions . In the meanwhile , I would buy some seashells and pearl necklaces, Besides, I want to spend the night in the hotel with my little baby eating some snacks, watching some cartoons . I had desired this travel so long. I promised my baby I would take him to travel to the seaside, so I must keep it. The second thing I want to do is to improve my spoken English . I want to read some original English books ,and I want to join some English clubs or English corners . Except that, I would spend some time with my friends watching movies in the theater. That's all .Thank you .
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