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The first thing I want to do is to travel to QingDao seeing some marine animals,including lobsters and sea lions . In the meanwhile , I would buy some seashells and pearl necklaces. Besides, I want to spend the night with my little baby eating some special snacks, watching some cartoons . I had desired this travel so long. I promised my baby I would take him to the seaside, so I must keep my promise. The second thing I want to do is to improve my spoken English . I want to read some original English, and I want to join some English clubs English corners or salons . Except that, I would pay a visit to some friends and relatives . The most interesting thing is that I would watch several movies with my husband in the theater.There are many interesting places in China. I expect your coming someday!
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