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Someone considers that happiness is the absence of problems.But I insist on the opposite point of view that happiness is not the absence of problems, but the ability to deal with them. It is difficult that to solve a problem.However,ou can develop your ability to deal with problems and be happy.For example,you try your best to think itwhen you cannot solve a math problem.Suddenly,you have a new idea to solve it.Therefore,you are happy and your ability to solve math problems have been developed.