作者能较熟练地使用词汇表达,一些学术词汇的使用也比较灵活;文中应适当增加从句和长难句的使用;行文稍欠流畅,应适当增加连接词的使用。
The campus environment is important of undergraduate so that it is necessary to create a green campus,it is advantage for everyone,so,many colleges have been creating a green campus.However,not only that refers to creating green building but also academic environment.In order to undergraduate enjoy better environment,they try them best to create green campus environment. In my view,for the sake of creating a green campus,that isn't one person can complete,it is needed everyone's efforts,academician,professor,even whole society.We are learning from campus every day.At first we should keep campus clean.The second,as an undergraduate,we should do what he do,establish a good learning atmosphere.Finally,through everyone's mutual competition. For creating a green campus,we will try our best to do it.