采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;拼写很棒,可适当增加高级词汇的使用;复杂句使用不错,句法规范。
Nowadays the on line shopping becomes more and more populate. it is a new trend of fashion. Variable and beautiful things are sale on net, you can get almost every thing you wanted in a good price which is cheaper than shops in realizes. There are many advantages for shopping on line, however, there are also several critical problems exposing about the on line shopping, such as bad quality, fakes ,false productions and so on. Some people do not believe the security of paying through the Internet, it is high risk to leak out the personal information in the Internet. To my opinion, the trend of the on line shopping will become more and more populate in the future. First of all,the productions sale on line are cheaper, because of the cost saving by selling productions directly from factories to clients. Secondary, it is so convenience that people are easy to order in any where connecting to the Internet and any time, the thing should be delivered on time to the place you want. Meanwhile, the sellers should keep high quality of their productions and the software development department keep promoting the security of the on line shopping website, make sure every deal is safe.