2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

文中衔接词丰富；可适当增加从句和复杂句的使用，注意文中的几处句子错误；词汇表达丰富度要注意，不过单词拼写错误较多。

Now many package of business machants are overpacked, the appearence of the machants is too luxious and wasterful. Why these curious phenomenons happened? What we want is the machant itself,not the skin of the package that is useless to us .It take us too many money and incease our finanice. The reason of the risen circumstance is possibly the beauty what is more pursued by people.Everyone likes the beauty of the world,such as butiful clothes ，bags,watches etc. Especially, when we give gifts to our friends, packages of the machant is more beautiful than the no package of the machant .When our friends accept the gifts ,he or she is very happy at sight of the package of the gifts. I think it is reasonable to package some business machants,but it is appropriate to the machant.