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The campus environment is important of undergraduate so that it is necessary to create a green campus,it is advantage for everyone,so,many colleges have been creating a green campus.However,not only that refers to creating green building but also academic environment.In order to good enjoy undergraduate in campus,they try them best to create environment of campus. In my view,for the sake of creating a green campus,that isn't one person can complete,it is needed everyone's efforts,academician,professor,even whole society.We are learning from campus every day.At first we should keep campus clean.The second,as an undergraduate,we should do what should do,establish a good learning atmosphere.Finally,through everyone's join hands. For creating a green campus better,we always try our best to do it.