小学一年级英语作文:My dog

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I have a lovely dog. My father sent it to me on my five years old birthday. She came from BeiJing. Her name is do-do which is because she is very fat, just like a ball. She is nine years old. She has curly hair which is as white as snow, and her two big brown eyes are really very beautiful. She always swings her tail and rushed to me with happy whenever I come home from school. I often take her out to go for a walk after dinner, I can feel from her action that she is love play outdoor as I. She like lies by my side while I am reading books or doing my homework. She has already been with me for nine years, and she is very faithful to me, she just like one of my family members, I like her very much!