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The stoudents union of our college will organize to take in vollunteers these days. Any student who will dedicate himself or herself to works for all can enroll in the activity. The vollunteers will come to the native citiven community,and take parting the consulting activities with the mangers of the community.To be a vollunteer is an honour things which can help us happy mentally,we can communicate better and etter with the society in this way. We need four students and absorbing the forth best in the enrollments. Welcome to apply to be a vollunteers.The telephone is 8888888 which can help you know it well at your time.