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The students union of our college will organize to take in volunteers these days. Any student who will dedicate himself or herself to works for all can enroll in the activity. The volunteers will come to the native citizen community,and take parting the consulting activities with the mangers of the community.To be a volunteer is an honour thing which can help us happy mentally,we can communicate better and better with the society in this way. We need four students and to absorb the forth best in the enrollments. Welcome to apply to be a volunteers.The telephone is 8888888 which can help you know it well at your time.