采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰;能够使用一些不错的从句;作者高级词汇方面要多累积,词汇表达不够丰富。
My school is CuiYuan middle school,My school is near my house ,so I always go by food. There are many activity take place in my school,such as raise money for the disabled,go to old people's home to do voluntary work,use bodylanguage to communicate with others and so on. This is my school.