采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰;词汇表达不够丰富,要增加高级词汇的使用;作者应适量增加从句的使用量。
My school is CuiYuan middle school,My school is near my house ,so I always go by food. Many activities take place in my school,such as raise money for the disabled,go to old people's home to do some voluntary works,use body language to communicate with others and so on. This is my school.How wonderful