衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳;文中拼写错误比较多,用词也稍显贫乏;增加一些从句的使用。
I have a good friend, he name is zhaoxiaonan.I like paly with he.we often go to beimeng for food .beceuse i love eat food.and te too.something he don't like me. beceuse i have a very bad question. but he often go to my home.and say sorry to me.so we are good friends.he have a big eye.and he have the good fair. so wo like to play whth he.