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There is a picture on my desk all the time. It’s Jim’s family. Jim is my best friend, but he left here to Australia three years ago. I always went to his home in the past and familiar to his family. Look at the picture, just like you can see, jim has a family of four people, his father, mother, and his sister. The boy held a basketball in hand is Jim. he really likes basketball, he goes to play basketball as long as he has time. The girl who stood next to Jim is his younger sister Jane. She is five years old, and she is beautiful, isn’t she? Look at her curly hair, how cute she is! Whenever I go to her home, she always asked me to read stories for her. She really is a lovely girl. I like her very much. The man who stood behind Jim is his father, he is an engineer, he looks very strong, Jim told me that his father could left both he and his sister above his shoulder. The woman standing next to his father is his mother, a beautiful woman, she is a math teacher. She is very kind and hospitality, and she can cook many delicious foods. I really love all of them, and I shall miss them foever!