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Since 2010,there have been many violence events in many schools,which really shocked a lot of chinese. So it is important to gurantee the school safety. In the campus, there are many equipments which may cause safety problems,such as many ball games ,up and down stairs ,even some solid from the labrotray.Therefore,the schools should make strict rules to prevent the students from being in danger. Firstly there alwayse be plenty of students after class, we, students must not run or chase somebody on the stairs ,it is really dangerous.secondly, every PE teacher should be responsible for the students .On the playground, we need to do as the teachers tell us .Thirdly ,the schools should make some good security guards guard the gate well. There are also a lot of measures we can take to improve the school safety .But what matters most is we should have the ability to protect ourselves .In a word , we must try our best to improve the school safety.