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小学英语一年级作文:Clocks

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:24浏览次数:2533
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小作者描绘了布朗一家的钟,中的大小到钟摆放的位置。
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句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文章衔接手法恰当;文章词汇表达比较灵活,高级词汇的使用要继续加强。

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Uncle Brown is a very funny man, and I like him very much. He is one of my father’s best friends. He lives not far away from my home, so I always go to his home to play. He is very found at collection clocks, especially ancient clocks. There are all kinds of clocks in Brown’s house. The biggest one is a table clock which is placed in the living room. It is already thirty years old. Very old, is it? But it still keeps good time. Uncle Brown told me that he got it from a friend. There is also a clock I adored very much. It is a Wall Clock which placed on the wall of Uncle Brown’s study. It is has a rounded shape with a crimson skin, and some figure carving on the frame. It’s really handsome. There are still many clocks I can’t introduce one by one. I really like to look at these clocks and hear Uncle tell me the story of them.

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