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When I was 5 years old, my mother took me to Beijing. I visited many places in Beijing as The Palace Museum, The Great Wall and The Summer Palace. When I enjoy these places, I found that my field of vision is more wide. Before I went to Beijing I just thought the world is very small, and there is nothing in the world is very interesting. But when I experience the beautiful of time, I found that it had many interesting places in the world where I did’ t find. The day was a special and meaningful day to me. I enjoyed the beautiful memory. I learned a lot. I think I will not forget the special day, and it will be kept in my memory forever.
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