作者能较熟练地使用词汇表达,一些高级词汇的使用也比较灵活;句式变化较为明显,句法基础不错;行文稍欠流畅,应适当增加连接词的使用。
Our school based student union will organize a volunteer activity on summer vacation.Attending the volunteer activity is meaningful, it not only can enrich our summer vacation life, but also can help others and acquire some knowledge or skills which are outside of your textbooks. So, do you want to join us, come on! The aim of the volunteer activity is spreading some environmental knowledge to others to protest our earth. During the activity, we need you to come back to our school about two weeks. And then we will adapt different ways to spread our environmental concept, like doing some environmental questionnaire survey in the streets ,playing some environmental games. If you have minds to protest our environment, if you want to improve yourself, if you want to spend a meaningful summer vacation, join us! we need you!