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一年级英语作文:A Busy Day

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:23浏览次数:2575
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小作者描绘了他繁忙的一天,帮妈妈做家务,做作业,打乒乓,看电视...多么充实的一天
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简单句型过多,从句使用不熟练;文章词汇表达比较灵活,高级词汇的使用要继续加强;文章层次较为清晰。

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May 31, 2016 fine Tuesday Today I got up early. After breakfast, I helped mom with some housework. Then I did my homework, first English, then math. Mom had told us that today were grandmother’s birthday, so we would attend her birthday party. I could not wait for that, how excited it would be! At 9:30 we left home for grandmothers’. When we got there, there are already so many persons, friends, relatives, it was really busy there. We enjoyed ourselves very much. We got home at 6 o’clock. In the evening I watched TV with my family, and then I prepared my next day’s work. I went to sleep at ten. What a busy day today!

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