文中用词稍显贫乏;恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词,衔接手法做的很棒;可适当增加复杂句和从句的使用。
I have a good friend,she is Tianli. we are together to study and to play in high school.with the development of friendship,we become more and more friendly.we don't leave each other.but we are angry each other sometimes.finally,we leave each other now,because we are studying in college.we are little communication,I free that i lose my good friend.