Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
文中词汇表达丰富度不足,一些学术词汇的使用也比较灵活;句式变化较为明显,可适当增加从句的使用;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨;可以适当增加副词的使用。
According to date provided by Bureau Of Labor Statistics,we can make a conclusion that people who are under the higher education earn more than whom get less.We can also say that education decide earning. As we can see over the form above,the average Unemployment rate in 2011 is 7.6%,and the unemployment rate is lower as the degree gets higher.The average Median weekly earnings is $797 in 2011,and people who are in higher degrees earn more than who are in lower degrees every week. The education play a extremely important role in our life,we need to pay more attention in the education career.And the government should do more to asure all the citizen's right to receive education.That is the best way to increase the Unemployment rate and make people earn more.