文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词;若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;作者词汇量有些小,要注意检查拼写错误。
The greatest of life is to spend it for something that will outlast it. what do you want to do when you grow up? There are various of answers about the questions, but all of them want to make their furture life meaningful in general. However, with the time goes, most of us lose our original dream, but why will we lose our dream?