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How should parents help children to be independent Actully, especially in China, this is real issue for all parents, everthing in china is developing so fast especially in economy. the parents wants to give the best things , the great things to their chidren, in that case it's easy spoil children. here are some tips I sammuried to help children to be imdependent. 1. Do not leave your children to live with his/her grandma, you should now that it's needed children brought up with their mother ,grandma tend to satisfay what children want to, this will spoil children and give the signal for children to find grand ma if they need help. 2. whatever age the children is, Please ask and guid children to help you do the house work, no matter thing is too tiny. 3. always give your children an encourage to do more working. even only help you to move a chair.