语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;可适当增加复合句和从句的使用;能较灵活地使用部分高级词汇,有基础拼写错误,需要注意一下。
Living in an age when the adolescents are lack of necessary guidance and supervision, so we can never figure out the fact that nowadays the youngests are excessive dependent on their parents which involve in making conclusions, plans and even children's everything. Children should be independent in order to adopt the changing of the world. So parents should do the following things.To begin with, children should finish their homework and daily life working by themselves. In addition, parents should let children concentrate their mind and thought on the thing in which they are engaged and like . Last but not least, children have their own thoughts, so parents should let children come up with their conclusions. To sum up, though parents play an important role in the period of children's growth, children must face some difficulties alone. So only parents let children go, children can deal with some problems correctly and confidently.