语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;文中一些从句的使用为文章增色;词汇表达较灵活准确,高级词汇使用过少,另外注意文中个别的拼写错误。
I like the remark "The greatest use of life is to spend it for something that will outlast it."That is very right,all people in the world must make their life meaningful.If you always live your life in how to eat better food,how to dress more beautiful clothes and any other things like them,i think when you are at the end of your life,you must feel no any meaningful things left in your life.So i suggest people can read more books,take more time with your family,have sports to make yourself healthy,protect our invironment andso on.