文中衔接词丰富;文中高级词汇的使用需加强,另外要注意词汇拼写的检查;采用了一些简单的从句。
As we all know that is an old say goings:what you hear is not true,but what you see is always true.however,this false celebrity wrold has mislead us for many years.we are all smart animals and we have our own idea to judge some phenomenons.it is necessary to think about it when we see or hear something. here is a real instance about myself,which can offer you some advice.i know clearly that i am a impulsory person and alway do something wrong. once a time ,my mother said that she wouldn't buy me a new coat because we had a hard time.but,she would buy a new one after the spring festival . then , immediately ,i thought that my mother would never buy me one new coat because she always had a hard life. i had a qurral with her and she was very sad. unfornatly ,i know the truth later and felt sorry. it is a lively example the implusory people for our mom would never cheat us.we should detect the behind reason of the scence which we saw or hear directly.it is unsensibly to make a quick judgement without thinking.so,open your mind ,think over things precisle and stop being a stupid person.
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