作者词汇表达较为熟练,高级词汇使用不是很多;如若增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
Currently,campus violence become increasingly serious.As a result,how to improve school safety arouse numerous people's attention.We should take practical measure to solve this problem. In campus,security guard are supposed to take turns to examine the surrounding of the school.We students should avoid making arguments with schoolmates when playing.Only in this way can we build up a enjoyable friendship.Additionally,when we meet a situation that someone is bullying the other in campus ,in no cases should we look on and do nothing.We must immediately inform our teachers of this. I sincerely hope that my advice will make a difference.