采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;作者句法基础不错,可适当增加复杂句的使用;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了。
My hometown is the most beautiful in fujian province of China.there are many special places where have fresh air and clear water, They can visit it with their children.Many tourists who have gone there liking there,because not only can we appreciate beautiful scenes,but also can eat fresh fruit.Only need we pay 10RMB to eat fresh and sweet fruit that is worth for us.It is important to relax our own mood for us,leading to have a good mood back to work and live. In a word,the place is suitable for foreign friends to visit, also have a good time for them.