2013年12月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):手机

文中应适当增加从句和长难句的使用；文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词，结构比较严谨；作者能较多样的使用词汇表达，但要注意词汇拼写的检查。

As we all know, mobile phone is becoming more and more important for our daily life. It takes convience for us. But if we don't give over the bad habbit--looking at our own mobile phone all the time and no matter whenever and wherever, we will can't be alive without it. Don't rely on it, please. Just like the picture, people are crossing the street looking at their cell phones and using walking sticks in order to see. The phenomenon is continuing, the world will be a confusion. The tracffic jams, the body illnesses and society safety can be wrong. Using mobile phone is doing more harm than good, especially overusing it can lead to many problems, such as short sight, spondylipathy, and etc. In order to live more long, please take your own mobile phone away as possibly as you can. Besides, when you walk along the street, raising your head to see forward.