文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,但单词拼写做的很棒;可适当增加从句的使用,注意文中的一些小错误;文章层次较为清晰。
Nowadays many Chinese like to celebrate some western festival. On one hand the culture becomes more and more international and people have open eyes. On the others hands, the country's culture become fuse. What's more, to celebrate western festival like western people have more fun. Every coins have two sides. Even the western festival improve us to have more fun and makes our life more colorful, it is easy for us to forget our traditional festival like the Gargon boat festival and so on. Our culture becomes western, the traditional festival is hard to keep on. On my view, we not to celebrate so much western festival. In addition, we should remember our traditional festival.
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