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Are successful children more important than happy children? “ Which is more important for children, the success or the happiness?” As far as I’m concerned, happiness is more important, for the reason that happiness leads to success. As you know, happiness and success can estimate the quality of life. Happiness, which contains a variety of meanings, is the best emotion of people, as for success, which usually means achieve something difficult, is the best result for a person. In fact, little children, being what they are, may prefer to play outside rather than stay at home to study. It is proved that a happy childhood has a great impact on people’s life, which helps children to develop an optimistic attitude and a creative vision. Secondly, happiness lasts forever while success is transitory. A saying says “seize the life, live it to full”, one’s life is short and limited, meanwhile it’s full of different possibilities. We have to pursue happiness forever, not only for children, but also for all human beings, only then will will our children becomes a real man. With happiness, children learns to give and take, to love and to deliver love. So let us build a happy atmosphere for our children, to make them grow up healthy and strong! Last but not least
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