学术词汇使用较丰富,拼写做的很棒;文中应增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构欠佳;可以适当增加副词的使用。
NOTICE To improve the students'spoken English,the Students'Union has determined to hold an English speech contest next month.The preliminary contest holds on September 18 in the school library which have enough space.The final contest will be held on September 29 in the auditorium of our university. The Union will invite seven experts who have amply experiences that was obtained by research abroad to serve as judges.Every speaker will be judged from three aspects:script,eloquence and the reaction of the audience.The maximum time of each speaker is eight minutes.The results will be announced on the spot. Folks who intend to attend this activity may send an E-mail to us including your personal information.Everybody is welcome to join it. Students'Union