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文中词汇表达较丰富恰当，但高级词汇稍显不足；恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词，衔接手法做的很棒；文中应适当增加从句和长难句的使用。
There are more and more people having plastic surgery.Forexample，in China,more and more Chinese go to Korea or other country to have plastic surgery.China has been the second place of plastic surgery in the world.Some people gain the confidence by plastic surgery,some people may get the job because of plastic surgery.However,in my opinion,the disadvantages of plastic surgeryoutweigh it's advantages First of all，the risk of plastic surgery is unknown.No one can promise the patient can leave the operating table safely，even doctors. What's more， no one can guarantee the patients can be more beautiful than before.According to CCTV news，there are 200，000 people‘s face being ruined in 10 years. What's more，plastic surgery will cost a lot.Most of people cannot afford it.For example，Eyelid surgery will cost 3000yuan at least，If you want your nose better，you have to pay at least 5500yuan’’ Last but not least，all of these surgeries only have temporary benefits，As time goes by，your face may be ruined .Even worse,it wil take more side effect to you. In a word，it is your free right to choose these way，but you'd better think it twice before you decide to do the plastic surgery.
