作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用。
Everyone has a hobby. My hobby is to play football. This is my favorite sport. I think that playing football is very interesting. Whydo I like to play football? One day, on my way to my home, I picked up a football, so I played soccer with my classmates. Finally, I fell in love with playing soccer. These days, I often play competitions about the football with my friends. I think that it is fun for me to play soccer with them. I love Bei ke han mu, a football star. He comes from England. I want to become a professional football player like him.