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My favorite sport Everyone has a hobby. My hobby is to play football. This is my favorite sport. I think that playing football is very interesting. Whydo I like to play football? One day, on my way to my home, I picked up a football, so I played soccer with my classmates. Finally, I fell in love with playing soccer. These days, I often play competitions about the football with my friends. I think that it is fun for me to play soccer with them. I love Bei ke han mu, a football star. He comes from England. I want to become a professional football player like him.