句法知识扎实,可适当增加长句的使用;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅。
When I was in high school,I thought to myself,what I will do in the future. And at that time,I was fascinated by my teacher's erudition,so,I decided to be a teacher like him when I grow up. I'm in ChongQin normal university now. I've learned a lot but I am going to learn more. And to be a teacher,I think communication is very important,so I will take part in all kinds of activities in our university. And I will grasp every opportunity to improve myself. There is going to have a career planning contest later this month,and I am about to take part in it. I will try my best to do well. I think I am going to show my ideal career to my teachers and classmates,which is English teaching. I hope that they can give me some advice or suggestions about it. When I graduate from university,I am going to a village school,because I'm from a small village,I know how the school there lack English teachers. For the lack of English teacher,the students there have no access to English when they were in primary school,so they can hardly keep up with other students when they are in high school or even when they are in universities. I think I will be happy to be an English teacher in a small village.