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my hometown My hometown ever was plenty of trees around every house. there is a river nearby in the front of yard and a geart number of fishes in the river.Everyday, the people worked during the whole day and they went home until the night was coming. All of them lived in a small and simple house. But nowdays ,everything have changed.