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In my way of thinking, I do not agree with the first opinion any more. In the twenty-first centry, inevitably, acquisition of information may become the critical fators determining whether you are an achiever in the work and study, combined with communication or not.The reason why the acquisition of information is so crucial lie on the following two aspects.To begin with, it's indisputable that the aquisition of informtion , distintly, can bring us the capacity that we can make right choice and solve problems more easily even under the straitened circumstances.In addition, nevertheless, inversely, if we can't recieve the right information or get the information too late, we may be in trubble to make the right judgement.