恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词,衔接手法做的很棒;文中一些从句的使用为文章增色;文中能较恰当地使用高级词汇,但存在较多拼写错误。
Some person take stock in the opinion taht it's absurd to admire the significanvce of information. On the contrary, they think it's enough that they can hold the situation if they adhere to they dreams and make efforts to reach it. In my way of thinking, I do not agree with the first opinion any more. In the twenty-first centry, inevitably, acquisition of information may become the critical fators determining whether you are an achiever in the work and study, combined with communication or not.The reason why the acquisition of information is so crucial lie on the following two aspects.To begin with, it's indisputable that the aquisition of informtion , distintly, can bring us the capacity that we can make right choice and solve problems more easily even under the straitened circumstances.In addition, nevertheless, inversely, if we can't recieve the right information or get the information too late, we may be in trubble to make the right judgement.