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2015年高考作文优秀范文:登山活动

发布时间:2015-09-30 16:35浏览次数:2454
要求:
  星光中学(Xing Guang High School)近期举行了一次登山活动。假定你是学校英语报记者,请写一篇短文,报道此次活动。内容包括:
  1. 时间与地点:4月10日,大青山(Daqing Mountain);
  2. 活动的过程;
  3. 你对于这次活动的评论。
  注意: 1. 词数120左右。
  2. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
用户的作文(系统评分84.0分
评语:

作者能较灵活准确地使用词汇表达,但高级词汇的积累还有很大的空间;作者有一定功底,可在平时练习中增加长难句的记忆;衔接词和过渡词用的很不错。

用户练习作文:

Recently, Xing Guang High school held a mountain climbing activity in Daqing Mountain, and the specific date is on 10th April. On that day, all the students queued up and waited at the gate of school, then the school bus took students to the foot of Daqing Mounatin. Students climbed the mountain with teacher together as each class have a teacher who was accompanied with them. Sometimes, when a few students felt tired and wanted to give up, other classmates encouraged them to keep on going. After two hours, all the students climbed the peak of mountain. Then they appreciated the beautiful scenery from the peak of the mountain and some students have prepared performance. Finally, all the students seemed to have a good time and went home. In my opinion, it is very nice to have such kind of activity because it can promote students relationships between each other, which can be helpful in their study and classroom interaction. Besides, climbing mountain is good for students to improve their physical condition. Wish our school would have more beneficial activities!

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