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Bob Do you remember that I mentioned last week that Su Qin,the Music Poet,who is noted for his elegant temperament,unique style,clean voice,calm mind adn warm emotions,is going to hold a concert on our campus?Well,I succeeded in buying two cheapest tickets for both of us,which is 25 yuan each.I hear that Su Qin also graduated from Tsinghua University and was a member of the famous band"Age of water