文中词汇表达贫乏,但是单词拼写做的不错;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构不严谨。
David: Hi,my name is Li Hua. I am a student in middle school. I live in Shanghai.I like collecting stamps and many sports such as football.I also can sing a lot of English song because I am interested in English.I want to go to England to improve my english. Except that,a lot of my classmates want to find their penfriend.Can you help them? Yours Li Hua