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Currently,there lots of controvercy over that the advantage or disadvantage of advertising on televisionr.However,on this issue,people's opinions differ sharply.Some individuals hold that amounts of Television advertising can be beneficial to the society.While some others believe that Television advertising has a bad effect on society.When it comes to me,for most people, TV advertising is just more benefit than the disadvantages. It can be said with certainty that it can promote the development of social economy and culture.To begin with, people can konw the latest product through watching TV advertisement, resulting in a desire to purchase goods. Good television advertising can satisfy people's material and spiritual needs. People can purchase goods through advertising, promoting consumption and social economic growth. Good public service ads can be passed to the correct values and culture and form a harmonious social environment. what's far more important is that elevision commercials for society to create wealth and promote the flow of information, is conducive to the development of business and trade. For example, a mobile phone company to advertise on TV to the company's profits increase and become more popularity. People understand through advertising products and services, the company through the promotion to be famous. Developed countries in the world has many great companies big reason is that their ads do well. Therefore, we have the reason to believe that Television advertising is helpful to promote the development of social economy and culture. It not only can create social wealth still can promote the spread of social information. The most important thing is that TV advertising makes people buy products them want.