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Hello!I am Jane.Come and see my father's day. In the moring,he usually gets up early.Then he cooks breakfaet.Because he wants my mother to sleep a little longer.After that,he often goes to work by car.He is always very busy.When he doesn't go home for lunch, my mother was worried.But he never comes home late.Sometimes he watchesTV in the evening. This is my father's day.What about your father?Can you tell me?