加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;文中词汇表达较为丰富准确,但存在单词拼写错误;连接词过少,建议增加衔接词汇的积累。
Dear Sigmund My name is Li Hong . I’m a student in grade nine in No 2 Middle School. My star sign is Gemini. Blue and yellow are my favorite colours. Now I have a big problem. My parents are very strict with me .They hardly give me time to play . But love cosplay very much .So I spend lots of time on it after school .Sometime I don”t hand in my homeworke on time .Now my stuy is getting worse and weorse .My parents and teachers want me to give up my only hobby . I don't know how to deal with it .Can you give me some advice? I hope to hear from you soon. Best wishes for you! Yours, Li Hong.