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Dear Sigmund My name is Li Hong. I’m a student in Grade nine in No.2 Middle School. My English name is Gemini. Blue and yellow are my favorite colour. Now I have a big problem. My parents are very strict with me so that I have only little time to play.But I love cosplaying very much. So I spend lots of time on it after school. Sometimes I don't hand in my homeworke on time. Now my study is getting worse and worse. My parents and teachers want me to give up my hobby. But I love it very much.I don't know how to deal with it .Can you give me some suggestions? I hope to recive your letter soon. Best wishes for you! Yours, Li Hong.