学术词汇使用较丰富,拼写做的很棒;采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰;文中应适当增加从句和长难句的使用;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
October 28 Yufei, I wonder if I could borrow your electronic dictionary which was purchased last year by your parents for a couple of days in that now I am translating some significant articles that includes a great many of academic vocabularies.Therefore,there are so many new words that I have to look them up frequently.I only have a traditional paper dictionary but,of course,it is not so convenient as an electronic one and therefore dramatically decreases my speed of translating.Consequently, I think your electronic dictionary is more appropriate for me.I promise that I will be very careful with your electronic dictionary and prevent any damage to it. Thank you very much. Zhang Wei