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What we can see from the picture is that a young man writes the name of Beckham on his face and the other young man spends 300 yuan in making his hair so that he can be looked like Beckham. This phenomenon can be seen throughout the world. Imitating superstars is the favorite thing that young men like to do. They view the stars who they respect and admire as the ones that they can follow. They spend a great deal of time imitating superstars, which leads to they have no energy to do other things especially studying. It influences the young men's study and growth. If this phenomenon can not be stopped, our own culture will be damaged. Personally, a number of measures should be taken to help us re-find ourselves. Actually, there are some measures that have been taken but cause a little effect, we known that whatever thing has a long period to go to get the goal.