作者词汇表达较为熟练,高级词汇使用不是很多;作者句法基本功不错,可适当增加从句的使用;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅。
Great changes have taken placed in my hometown. In the past, my home town was surrounded by green trees and we can see fishes swimming joyfully around in the clear rivers. At that time, the houses were simple , streets were narrow and people were living in a poor life. But now, tall buildings, fabulous stores and plants are everywhere, and the streets are full of rushing cars which in various sizes; while the payments of the development of the industry are as below: the environment goes form bad to worst; the number of the trees decreasing from year to year and fishes have disappeared from the rivers. Thus, taking sound actions to fight against the pollution is an urgency!