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To begin with,I want to go to the library to do volunteer work and I would like to read some book which is very intresting.Then,I will learn the subject of high school by myself.And I also want to do some housework because it can make my parents do not feel too tired.Last but not least,I am going to the place of intrest.Do you want to play with me?
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